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雅思作文求批改~本人语法基础很差,希望高手指点……特别是语法方面的……
Therehasbeenmuchdiscussionrevolvingaroundtheissueofwhetherapersonneedtobecometrulysuccessfulcannotbelearnedatuniversityorinasimilareducationalinstitution.Inthisessay,Iwillcompareandcontrasttwotypicalopinionsregardingthisissue.
Therearesomesoundreasonsforpeopletobelievethatapersoncangetsuccesswithoutgoingtocollege.AsfarasIamconcerned,thisviewmaybebasedontheconsiderationthatafewschooldropout(orneveracceptedthecollegeeducation)personsgetastaggeringsuccess,forinstanceSteveJobsandBillGates.Theycreatedtheircompanyandensuredthecompanysuccessivevictoriesevenchangedourworld.Moreover,itiswidelyacceptablethattheworldtransformedsoquicklythatwecanhardlyfollowingtheregularpatternoftheeconomicmarket,theknowledgewestudyinuniversityalwaysbehysteretic,whenwegraduatefromschooltheknowledgewelearnedmanybeeliminated,especially,inhigh-techindustriesascomputersortelecommunications.Anotherargumentthatcanbeusedtosupporttheirbeliefismostofthegraduatesareengageinworkareawhichisnotthemajortheystudiedinschool.ThecompetitioninjobhuntingisfierceinanyofthecitiesofChina,soithasbeenverydifficulttofindadecentjob.
Bycontrast,someothermayclaimthatstudyinuniversityorasimilareducationalinstitutionisnecessaryforpeopletogettrulysuccessful.Themainreasonfortheirviewisobviously—learnincollegeisanexperiencewhichcangivestudentssomeunforgettablememoriseofstudy,thereforetheymustlearnbythemselves,workwithothersandadapttothesituation,schoolingteachthemskillsbeforetheygetintothesociety.ButIhavetosaythisdoesnotsoundveryconvincingsinceallsuccessfulmenhaveaneducation.Somegotitwithoutgoingtoschoolandsomegotitaftergoingtoschool.
Havingconsideredtherespectivemeritsofbothviews,Ithinkpeoplecangetsuccesswithoutuniversityeducation.AlsoIsuggestyoungpeopleshouldgotoschoollearnsomebasicscientificknowledge,Inordertoliveabetterlifeinsociety.
