holle,everyone,My name is Ozzie.I''m 11 yes old .I from yongkang ,I go to minzhu Elementary school.Now,T''ll say something about my teacher.My math teacher My math teacher —Miss ying.She is quiet ，she is a younglady，and she is funny.Her favorite food is greenbeans.And she love to playcomputer games.Very much.That’s all.Thank you.名师点评：总体来说，这篇作文写得不错，刚好把学过的知识加以运用，将我们的数学老师从外貌、性格和爱好方面给予了描述。但是得注意其中的语法错误，特别是：一个句子中的各单词之间应该有空格，不然读起来可真是费力哦，记得句首首字母大写哦！有勇气写英语作文，值得表扬！具体修改如下：holle,(Hello 的书写有错，首字母也应该大写) everyone, My name is Ozzie. I''m 11 yes (years书写有错)old.I (I后加上be动词am,或者缩写为I’m)from yongkang( Yongkang地点首字母大写)I go to minzhu （应该是Mingzhu）elementary school.Now, T''ll (应该是I’ll) say something about my teacher. My math teacher My math teacher —Miss ying.(about后这句话可以改为my math teacher —Miss Ying，这样就简单明了了)She is quiet，she is a young lady，and she is funny. Her favorite food is green beans. And she love to play（love to play改为loves playing）computer games. Very much. (去掉very前的标点符号，将very首字母小写)That’s all. Thank you.（学乐中国特聘教师：张玉明老师）2009-12-29 11:51:00
