My FathrThr is always a brilliant imag living in my hart. That is my dar fathr. Sn through th ys of many othr popl, fathr sms to b a vry ordinary prson. But h is quit xtraordinary in my ys, I hav nvr lost my wondr at his good-prsonalitis such as dilignc, dvotion, car, optimism vr sinc my childhood.Bing a farmr, fathr works vry hard in th filds all th yar round. H works from dawn till dusk vry day and vn till midnight whn it is th harvst sason. H sldom njoys lisur with othr farmrs vn if th farm work is not much. H chooss to liv a busy lif with rluctanc to stop for a whil.Fathr dvots all himslf to our family. As w ar poor, h always tris his bst to support our family and afford th tuitions for my brothr and m. For th whol family, for brothr and m, h nvr stops working laboriously in th filds throughout th yar. Now h has got a wrinkld fac and whit hair bcaus of xcssiv hard work, looking much oldr and wakr than any othr prson of his ag. In spit of all this, fathr nvr complains to us. It is his full dvotion that w'r living a bttr lif now. It is his full dvotion that both my brothr and I ar abl to study at collg.Fathr shows much car to us childrn and my mothr as wll. Whnvr thr is any dlicious food on th tabl, h just lavs it to us whil h taks th simpl on himslf. If my brothr and I fall ill, h will not hsitat a momnt to gt som mdicin for us or tak us to s th doctor. My mothr suffrs a bad disas. Fathr looks aftr hr vry carfully. H nvr lts mothr do any havy work both at hom and in th fild. Mothr apprciats him m much that sh oftn praiss him as a modl husband bfor othrs.Fathr is a prson full of optimism. H nvr complains about our poor lif. H is nvr frustratd by troubl. H oftn tlls us that vrything will b all right if w hav nough confidnc in lif. Du to his optimism, w ar all confidnt to fac our lif and work.W all think that fathr is not in th last an ordinary man. H plays an xtraordinary rol in my family. W can't hav anything without him. Now I'm pursuing furthr studis at collg far away from fathr. I miss him vry much. And I oftn s him in my drams. His grat imag is dply carvd in my mind.评语本文作者以朴实的语言充满感情地刻画了父亲的不平凡的形象,分别从四个不同的角度描述了父亲的勤劳、奉献、关爱和乐观。内容真实感人,行文简洁流畅,结构清晰,组织有条有理,首尾呼应,给读者以强烈的感染力。 作者用词简洁精确,并能很好地尝试一些新学的词汇及表达,使简洁的行。文更为生动。作者没有运用太多复杂的句式,但能适当运用介词短语、分词结构、强调及重复的手法,恰到好处 地突出了行文句式的变化,使文章更耐读。
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